Jacob Black Love Story! Part 2!!

Hi...So i didnt get any comments for the last one but i did get 12 responses so I guess sumone read it. Well if u have read it id really appretiate a comment saying wat u like and wat u dont like about the story. I dont mind critisim(sp). Dont care if u hate it. Jst tell me how to make it better and how u wud like it. Also do u want it dirty, kinda dirty, or totally clean?? answer in comments. BTW: __ means ur name!!