Shhhh.
(First story on quibblo. Heh. Give me pointers in the comments also pros and cons)
Characters- Name: Izu, Miwa Age:? Gender: Female
Chapter 1
Chapter One -Nothing Specail
Outside the area was cold, bitter, yet so fragile. White flower petals rained down from heavens and painted the scenery with ice. With the most opposites inside.
I turned on the hot water; as it poured into the tub it steamed with anger and furry. I slowly stripped off my clothes and turned off the running water. Perfect. I slowly sunk. The temperature of the water warmed my body after being in the snow storm outside. "Ahhhhh." I sighed with relief still slowly sinking in just before my nose. Slowly closing my eyes from content I drifted away so smoothly.
I had drifted into a sleep. I only realized when it got cold. I lay naked in the drained tub. My vision blurred to my own bathroom. I wanted to get up but i couldn't. I moved one muscle and pain surged through me. My head was throbbing. I managed and struggled for dear life to get up. Vision blurred, still I wrapped the towel I left around me, hugging my body ever so lovingly. I turned on the sink with cold water. Breathing was hard to do. I splashed the water on the mirror right above. The water i thought I kept running. My vision cleared a lot so but I still couldn't stand nor breathe. It was hot and I was freezing at the same time. Looking at the sink I realized, the water's gone. Looking back to the mirror I see only tiny droplets of water.
Using the counter to help me stand now wasn't enough and I almost fell but leaned against the mirror. It was so cold and I felt much more relieved. So in this case I licked my mirror for all the water. Why didn't I use that water I thought before in an instant I had blacked out.
After blacking out her limbs went numb in her unconscious state. She fell to the ground and severely hit her head on the counter. Blood poured out as she still laid there.
I turned on the hot water; as it poured into the tub it steamed with anger and furry. I slowly stripped off my clothes and turned off the running water. Perfect. I slowly sunk. The temperature of the water warmed my body after being in the snow storm outside. "Ahhhhh." I sighed with relief still slowly sinking in just before my nose. Slowly closing my eyes from content I drifted away so smoothly.
I had drifted into a sleep. I only realized when it got cold. I lay naked in the drained tub. My vision blurred to my own bathroom. I wanted to get up but i couldn't. I moved one muscle and pain surged through me. My head was throbbing. I managed and struggled for dear life to get up. Vision blurred, still I wrapped the towel I left around me, hugging my body ever so lovingly. I turned on the sink with cold water. Breathing was hard to do. I splashed the water on the mirror right above. The water i thought I kept running. My vision cleared a lot so but I still couldn't stand nor breathe. It was hot and I was freezing at the same time. Looking at the sink I realized, the water's gone. Looking back to the mirror I see only tiny droplets of water.
Using the counter to help me stand now wasn't enough and I almost fell but leaned against the mirror. It was so cold and I felt much more relieved. So in this case I licked my mirror for all the water. Why didn't I use that water I thought before in an instant I had blacked out.
After blacking out her limbs went numb in her unconscious state. She fell to the ground and severely hit her head on the counter. Blood poured out as she still laid there.



3 Comments
well...it's good especially with all of the metamorphic parts, which make it sound pretty and sophisticated ...BUT its a little short and confusing, so my suggestion is 1. either make this chapter longer OR 2. write another chapter soon or else people will just pass it by. but i really like it so far even tho i am lost!! 5 stars!!
I actually am writing other chapters I just got busy with other stories. heh >.
I've read many new stories lately, and this one caught my attention the most. Other stories are just boring and are about feelings, but this one is GREAT! :) However confusing, I'd give it 5 stars!!