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heyy guys after you have finished reading this leave a comment on what you think should be the name of this poem/story......thanx guys
i stand alone in the park
you walked away from me
forever and ever.
You said you loved me
you stabbed me in the back
leaving my alone crying away the pain
the pain you caused.
i dreamed one day
you'll come back
to hold me tight in your arms once again.
belonging to the world
i walk and walk
waiting to reach my destination
coming closer and closer
i see your face
the face i loved for ever and a day
i walk closer and closer
you turn to mist
fading away when i touch your face.
i wonder where you went
i wonder why you left
you loved me didnt you
i sit crying
on the side of the road.
then two feet appear infront of me
i look up
a tall man stands over me
and lifts me up.
he touches my face
i start to fade and then
out of no where
i vanish into dust.
you walked away from me
forever and ever.
You said you loved me
you stabbed me in the back
leaving my alone crying away the pain
the pain you caused.
i dreamed one day
you'll come back
to hold me tight in your arms once again.
belonging to the world
i walk and walk
waiting to reach my destination
coming closer and closer
i see your face
the face i loved for ever and a day
i walk closer and closer
you turn to mist
fading away when i touch your face.
i wonder where you went
i wonder why you left
you loved me didnt you
i sit crying
on the side of the road.
then two feet appear infront of me
i look up
a tall man stands over me
and lifts me up.
he touches my face
i start to fade and then
out of no where
i vanish into dust.
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I can't think of a name but I really liked it
thanx i couldnt think of anything so i just wrote it n let you guys name it
i think its great...you should call it something along the lines of 'dissapearing face' or 'vanished'
hows that sound?
sounds good sasha
y thankyou..
i'll change it soon but i wanna see what others say bout it but urs is good
y thankyou
no problamo
"Just out of reach"...:)
now that sounds awesome
How about "Transparently Visible"?
these are all good god
the day u left me maybe but the poem waz so awesome
y thankyou shiviy
u welcome :)
it was awesome bub :]
name: "Love In This Mist"