Lost in darkness (undone)
Chapter 1
Max chapter #1
I cant sleep turning over looking at the clock 3:00 am they wont even notice if im missing I think sliping on a pair of skinny jeans and my black veil brides shirt and grap my ipod I opened the window with a click putting on my shoes and slip out into the darkness its cold I shiver but shut the window and walk I have no clue were I should go but I walk in the direction of the park cat and mouse starts playing on my ipod a tear streams down my cheak glade its dark and no ones outside to see me I look down and all of a sudden bump into somthing falling down "woah!" I said looking up to see what i hit its so dark I can barley see I can make out a figure "Sorry i didnt think anyone was out here." said a boys voice reaching a head out to me I take it " Thanks." I say now that im a few inches away from his face I can see that hes about 14 and really cute I smile then he smiles back "Sorry agian im max what are you doing out in the middle of the night?" "I was about to ask you that." "Um i cant sleep." "Me nether" I said I looked at his clother he has wereing a white shirt "Is that blood!?" I asked him looking at the red brown stain covering half his shirt "Its red paint i was painting today and I didnt changed my shirt yet" He stutterd out "Theres some on ur face to.." "Im messy okay?" "And you didnt bother washing your face?" "Like i said im messy." I let it go not sure what to do next i messed with my ipod standing there looking like a retard im "Sure what songs do you have?" he asked looking at my ipod "Escape the fate not bad The old blessthefall is my fav the new guys not to bad though." he smiled at me agian FANGS HE HAS FANGS I blinked and they were gone I backed up a few steps his smile dropped "Whats wrong?" He asked me taking a step closer



3 Comments
Nice, five stars (:
I think you should work on the punctucation, more in the begining than in the end. But other than that, I thought it was really good. Im new here, so if you wanna check out some of my writings, go ahead (:
Thanks im okay 13 so sorry about that :)
more please ^^