MAGICAL ME! A Hogwarts Story About Kaylee Candlerson
This is just a random story I wanted to write! Here is information about the main character:
Name: Kaylee Candlerson
Blood Status: Half-Blood (mom is witch, dad is muggle)
House: Gryffindor
Appearance: Curly blond hairs falls at mid back, eyes-strange indigo color, freckles with a round nose.
Traits: Athletic, brave, sweet, loyal, smart
Other: Baby sister Therese(age 2), older brother Andrew(age 17), in her 5th year(age 15), quidditch beater, best friend is Cassandra(Cassie)Velburn
I took a deep breath, and I stepped onto the Hogwarts express for my fifth time. My baby sister, Therese, who was only about ten feet away from me, shrieked and waddled over. “Kaylee!” she cried, “Don’t go!”
I picked the two year old up and brushed her wispy blond hair out of her face and said, “You don’t have to worry, Therese. I promise I will be back for Christmas!” She smiled and shuffled back to my mother who picked her up then smiled and waved goodbye to me.
I turned around only to see my older brother Andrew, staring at me impatiently. “Come on,” he said, “the train is about to leave and the compartments are filling up!” My brother ran down the narrow aisle and into a compartment with his friends Teddy and Joey, leaving me to find a compartment on my own.
I made my way to the very last one, where I knew my best friend Cassie would be sitting, as always. When I opened the sliding wood door, I saw a very familiar sight. Cassie Velburn was fighting with her twin brother Marcus. Again. While Cassie was yelling at Marcus at the top of her lungs, she noticed me out of the corner of her eye and let out a small gasp of surprise. “What a nice greeting,” I joked as my best friend ran over and hugged me.
“Kaylee!” she yelled, while Marcus just started laughing.
When he calmed down, though, he said, “Hey.”
“Hi, Marcus,” I blushed. His straight blond hair was almost the exact opposite of Cassies. We all sat down on the red felt seats of the express and talked about our summers until Marcus went off to find some of his other friends or the snack lady or something. Suddenly, out of no where, the train screeched to a halt and everything was silent and still.
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That's the end of chapter 1, I hope you liked it!!! Feel free to comment suggestions and stuff!! I wanna know what you think!!!
~rabbitlover2008
I picked the two year old up and brushed her wispy blond hair out of her face and said, “You don’t have to worry, Therese. I promise I will be back for Christmas!” She smiled and shuffled back to my mother who picked her up then smiled and waved goodbye to me.
I turned around only to see my older brother Andrew, staring at me impatiently. “Come on,” he said, “the train is about to leave and the compartments are filling up!” My brother ran down the narrow aisle and into a compartment with his friends Teddy and Joey, leaving me to find a compartment on my own.
I made my way to the very last one, where I knew my best friend Cassie would be sitting, as always. When I opened the sliding wood door, I saw a very familiar sight. Cassie Velburn was fighting with her twin brother Marcus. Again. While Cassie was yelling at Marcus at the top of her lungs, she noticed me out of the corner of her eye and let out a small gasp of surprise. “What a nice greeting,” I joked as my best friend ran over and hugged me.
“Kaylee!” she yelled, while Marcus just started laughing.
When he calmed down, though, he said, “Hey.”
“Hi, Marcus,” I blushed. His straight blond hair was almost the exact opposite of Cassies. We all sat down on the red felt seats of the express and talked about our summers until Marcus went off to find some of his other friends or the snack lady or something. Suddenly, out of no where, the train screeched to a halt and everything was silent and still.
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That's the end of chapter 1, I hope you liked it!!! Feel free to comment suggestions and stuff!! I wanna know what you think!!!
~rabbitlover2008
22 Comments
Wait it just ended! I like it, it is very discriptive!
i am not finished yet...I have more chapters to add after I get 3 positive comments!
This is really good!!:D I like the way you made it before Harry's time :)
Harry's in some of the later chapters, but he is not very important and is only in his third year-but thanks!
Such a good story, I love the way that all of the descriptive words all flowed together in unison with the nouns and verbs! Great story, please write more!!!!!!! ^_^
haha! I luv sirius, i hope they never find him!!!! yay!!!!! Why did she pass out?
the dementor freaked her out...I didn't really think that through....huh....
haha! i like it! AWESOME!!!
yay 3 chapters! ur on a roll:D
This is good. You need to use quotes, though, around dialogue.
Sorry whenever I use them it puts these weird boxes on them!!! Can you help???
Wait...HAHA!! I've fixed it!!!
This is really good, but (as Muggleborn_on_the_run said), it's kinda confusing without quotation marks.
this is great! XD
... but i can't read it =(
it needs quotation marks on the direct speech!
this is really good :D plz write more!!