screwed up love (harry potter love story)
u thing u no harry potter but have u every seen it like this i dont think so
omg i cant believe i am finally going to go to hogwarts thought Jorden. Now all i have to do if find platform 9 3/4. I was so excited on the way here i never thought about where i would find the platform. then i see a bunch of red head boys and one with jet black hair go through a pillair. I when up to them and asked where they were going. One of the red head boys said hogwarts how about you. I said same, but i can't find platform 9 and 3/4. and that is the day i met me best friends Ron weasly and Harry Potter.
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Alright, let's start with the basics. Your spelling needs work. It's "pillar", not "pillair". You have some word confusion ("when" should be "went"). You're missing punctuation and capitalization. And it's Weasley.
ill work on it
heyy if you read this put comments on!!!!!!!!!!!!!
if u guys want more i need 4 more comments
Its pretty good, needs some work, but I like the story :)
oh please add more chapters!!
AWESOME!! nxt plzz!!
lotttttttz of errors but good!! :D
Improve your writing skills
:( You're probably making her feel really bad. I think it's good!
She needs to improve her writing skills. I'm not trying to make her feel bad. It's the blunt truth.
Aw I saw a comparison, conflict and friendship . Good story, keep it up ! :D
Could use a little work but is really good!!! If you get writers block or need some help send me a message