Escape The Deathly Eclipse
This is a poetry work of mine that I'd like to pass on to those who I know are talented when it comes to writing :) I'll set up a question asking who would like to add on, and a bonus "What you thought needed work..." all that. :) Please enjoy, and think of the title as you read. Thank you.
Love has no bounds....
Not until I looked into your eyes,
I could see I was doomed...
All my past vows would be broken,
I saw this with just a look,
That all my ties would come undone,
There would be no return to my old self...
That was perfect for me.
My heart was set,
Boiling turmoil in my side....
Butterflies flittering with joy,
And an instant raging consequence for temptation to be beckoned with,
My heart found no likeness for no other,
My soul was joined and proud to only be that person's only,
Love has no bounds,
I see that now,
In your gaze.
In the sound of your voice...
In the heart kept promises I have made.
A destroyer I once was,
Memories I ask not to relive,
A heartless soul...
Filled with the hatred..
For those who left--
Left me to burn....
For those who currupted---
Currupted my heart to the final bit,
Poisoned---
Poisoned so the hopes of death would be paid in full.....
Hatred has no bounds,
And is in the eyes of everyone,
Everything...
I ask for all of that to change
But a fragile soul like mine can't possibly function an ordeal like that on their own.....
I felt tresspassed once before,
And so....
When I let my glimpse turn into a gaze,
And then a stare of your marvel beauy,
I let my self feel the monumental ball and chain fall to the bitter end,
And disenagrate in the fiery demolition of Volcanic fire....
I fell head over heels,
And still...
My point has not yet been proven wrong,
Love has no bounds,
Hatred does....
Hatred keeps you locked captive like a beast,
Afraid to cast their own shadow in broad day light.....
Hatred leaves your screams silent....
Muffled as if burried aive, 6 feet under
Hatred is an illness,
Brought like that of lonelines,
"Loneliness is a killer on the heart" (Quote By Razor9350)
As well is Hatred....
Brought together only make the matters worse in hand....
So please,
If found in heart break,
And wish to neer love again.....
You will find the best cure..
Is to let your heart love, in order to heal.....
The wise words I speak....
Mean little,unless you act out upon them
And see, the dramatic changes that can occur.
Escape From the Deathly Eclipse
That only hatred has the power to sucum love,
But love over powers death, sacrifice....
Much more than what is properly understood,
Escape....
And find your love for the who is destined for you,
Escape from hatred's captivity,
Escape....
The agony of loneliness....
Not until I looked into your eyes,
I could see I was doomed...
All my past vows would be broken,
I saw this with just a look,
That all my ties would come undone,
There would be no return to my old self...
That was perfect for me.
My heart was set,
Boiling turmoil in my side....
Butterflies flittering with joy,
And an instant raging consequence for temptation to be beckoned with,
My heart found no likeness for no other,
My soul was joined and proud to only be that person's only,
Love has no bounds,
I see that now,
In your gaze.
In the sound of your voice...
In the heart kept promises I have made.
A destroyer I once was,
Memories I ask not to relive,
A heartless soul...
Filled with the hatred..
For those who left--
Left me to burn....
For those who currupted---
Currupted my heart to the final bit,
Poisoned---
Poisoned so the hopes of death would be paid in full.....
Hatred has no bounds,
And is in the eyes of everyone,
Everything...
I ask for all of that to change
But a fragile soul like mine can't possibly function an ordeal like that on their own.....
I felt tresspassed once before,
And so....
When I let my glimpse turn into a gaze,
And then a stare of your marvel beauy,
I let my self feel the monumental ball and chain fall to the bitter end,
And disenagrate in the fiery demolition of Volcanic fire....
I fell head over heels,
And still...
My point has not yet been proven wrong,
Love has no bounds,
Hatred does....
Hatred keeps you locked captive like a beast,
Afraid to cast their own shadow in broad day light.....
Hatred leaves your screams silent....
Muffled as if burried aive, 6 feet under
Hatred is an illness,
Brought like that of lonelines,
"Loneliness is a killer on the heart" (Quote By Razor9350)
As well is Hatred....
Brought together only make the matters worse in hand....
So please,
If found in heart break,
And wish to neer love again.....
You will find the best cure..
Is to let your heart love, in order to heal.....
The wise words I speak....
Mean little,unless you act out upon them
And see, the dramatic changes that can occur.
Escape From the Deathly Eclipse
That only hatred has the power to sucum love,
But love over powers death, sacrifice....
Much more than what is properly understood,
Escape....
And find your love for the who is destined for you,
Escape from hatred's captivity,
Escape....
The agony of loneliness....
7 Comments
VERY well-written! [applauds] I love the transition in attitude. It feels very natural and not forced at all. Wonderful work. :)
Are you noow interested in writing a new chapter then? :)
I like that story
niiicceee.... i usually overdo my story poems. this ones cool tho.
clap clap bravooo :)
alsome great
awesome!!!! :D