Little Red
Hello again :) this is the start of a fairy story I'm thinking of writing. I may not continue it but I just thought I'd put the idea out there to see what you guys thought of it!! Bye :D
The young girl was floating in the river. Her hair billowing around her pale face like dark storm clouds. Even in death, her pretty face bore a kind of seriousness, her brows were furrowed in confusion.
Eva watched as the pretty child floated slowly upstream, her red dress shining like a beacon in the grey light of the forest. Death had taken this girl, but Eva knew that Death wasn't selfish. Quite the opposite in fact. The little girl in red had brought this on herself somehow. She'd involved herself in things she didn't understand... dangerous things.
That was just how things were in the Grey Forest.
Eva watched as the pretty child floated slowly upstream, her red dress shining like a beacon in the grey light of the forest. Death had taken this girl, but Eva knew that Death wasn't selfish. Quite the opposite in fact. The little girl in red had brought this on herself somehow. She'd involved herself in things she didn't understand... dangerous things.
That was just how things were in the Grey Forest.
26 Comments
Thanks for reading the first tiny little chapter! I would really appreciate some comments :) even criticizing ones!!
sad...
but good
thankyou!
Coolio ;) Yours is good, but it would really help if it was longer. And it reminds me of the Peverell Brothers. I think that's their last name, I can't remember.
from what little i just saw, i think that ur a good writer. more!
sound interesting... You should continue with this!
Awesome! Love the similes :) :D great detail.
Kool! Continue plz with a hamburger on top!
Sorry I'm hungry and bored!
haha a hamburger... XD
kepp on goin