Did you really

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Chapter 1

poem

by:

Jump_then_fall

I remember the day
You had me thinking that you really care
That you really loved me
But then I saw you with her
Telling her the same thing
But you actually mean it
Now I'm wondering if you were telling me the truth
Or was it just a lie
Why did I even believe you
Did you really loved me

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DontForgetMeIBeg 06-08-2011 at 4:23 PM 0 0
Your so good at writting! You rock!
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BritzRule 06-08-2011 at 4:24 PM 0 0
GRRRRR U MAKE ME JEALOUS SO GOOD AT POEMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NIZE DUDE!!!!! ;D
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Kiko_Dark_Fury 06-08-2011 at 5:12 PM 0 0
Its really good! :D
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I_will_Bite_you 06-08-2011 at 5:57 PM 0 0
u can write!!! :)
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Your_Song 06-08-2011 at 6:02 PM 0 0
:) ur really good at writing
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Fall_For_You 06-08-2011 at 8:49 PM 0 0
ur not jst good at writing ur awesome at it!!! :D
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Dumb_Blondes_Rock 06-08-2011 at 9:14 PM 0 0
ur ah-mazin thats reall good! keep up the good work!(:
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Mad_as_Hatter 06-09-2011 at 12:19 AM 0 0
Wow. This captures what every girl feels at one point in time. Good work.

Watch your grammar, though (capitialization)
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Mellarkios 06-09-2011 at 2:14 AM 0 0
Good, but the punctuations could be better.
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hmiknowyou 06-09-2011 at 5:02 AM 0 0
Very good :) Just a small tip, try to stay in one time frame (past, present, future) when wrtiting something like this. (Don't write 'loved' and then 'love')
Nice job though :P