the true loves
Chapter 1
1st day of it all
it was the beggining of the 7th grade.I saw the biggest breakup ever.I looked over there, i saw the guy look my direction in surprize and fear i looked away and started walking towards my 1st class which luckily is away from the breakup.I know the dude of course everyone does hes the quater back on the football team and hes the biggest player in the school and in my last school hes in 8th grade but when he was in 7th grade he was dateing a 6th grade in my school while dateing a 7th grader in all of his classes everyone knows about that because the girl has the biggest mouth in the entire school.
speaking of the devil here comes leslie.I laughed and hugged mellissa and beth
so how was summer you to asked beth .well since u asked wonderful said mellissa.You leslie it great i guess.well umm anyways said beth i guess mine was great too.Who heard about the fight between joushua , glory, and stephani ,said mellissa ,i heard about it said beth but i really didnt care everyone knew that was gonna happen anyways.well umm how bout you lesie watd u hear.All i heard was that the girls just found out about it and they started fighting and glory punched the dude when she tried hitting stephani then pricable sink (yes thats the accual name of a princable at the school im going next year )stepped in and glory went to the office while stephani had to work her problems out which involved the yelling at the dude.Really leslie thats all u heard that was all there was.I know i was just jokeing but is that all true i didnt see anything on the dudes face.What u saw them just now all i got to do was listein to people talking about it.Well oh well because i still no about it at least.Yea said beth but i still wsish i couldve seen it that wouldve been soo awsome.leslie brooke in how would that have been awsome theres just way to much drama already here im gonna go to the restroom.Luckily for me i have my nail clippers that have that small knife thingy.She went to the last stall because people say it was haunted but i never believed it because it seems in every school i go to theres always a ghost.So i closed the door and locked it i know my friends wont come looking for me.So i took out the clippers and made it where it would go deep i didnt know what to do so i drew a heart with a crooked line going through the middle to repersent a broken heart everyone knew that represents me the best ever since my parents died and all i had was the nanny they gave me they knew they where gonna die that very day so they didnt want to let me go of course i didnt know what was happening since i was only 3 when i was 10 i found out what happend i just thought they were on a buisness trip like normal but the nanny finally told me and i brooke down in tears i ran into the bathroom and found the sharpest thing in there which was sissors i started the water and took all my cloths off i stepped in the water which was steaming hot which was perfect i started light then i went deep in my skin the more i went the more i cried i decided to make a heart then its no more love its a heart love so i got the idea to make a broken heart.Then the bell rang for 5mins to get to class
speaking of the devil here comes leslie.I laughed and hugged mellissa and beth
so how was summer you to asked beth .well since u asked wonderful said mellissa.You leslie it great i guess.well umm anyways said beth i guess mine was great too.Who heard about the fight between joushua , glory, and stephani ,said mellissa ,i heard about it said beth but i really didnt care everyone knew that was gonna happen anyways.well umm how bout you lesie watd u hear.All i heard was that the girls just found out about it and they started fighting and glory punched the dude when she tried hitting stephani then pricable sink (yes thats the accual name of a princable at the school im going next year )stepped in and glory went to the office while stephani had to work her problems out which involved the yelling at the dude.Really leslie thats all u heard that was all there was.I know i was just jokeing but is that all true i didnt see anything on the dudes face.What u saw them just now all i got to do was listein to people talking about it.Well oh well because i still no about it at least.Yea said beth but i still wsish i couldve seen it that wouldve been soo awsome.leslie brooke in how would that have been awsome theres just way to much drama already here im gonna go to the restroom.Luckily for me i have my nail clippers that have that small knife thingy.She went to the last stall because people say it was haunted but i never believed it because it seems in every school i go to theres always a ghost.So i closed the door and locked it i know my friends wont come looking for me.So i took out the clippers and made it where it would go deep i didnt know what to do so i drew a heart with a crooked line going through the middle to repersent a broken heart everyone knew that represents me the best ever since my parents died and all i had was the nanny they gave me they knew they where gonna die that very day so they didnt want to let me go of course i didnt know what was happening since i was only 3 when i was 10 i found out what happend i just thought they were on a buisness trip like normal but the nanny finally told me and i brooke down in tears i ran into the bathroom and found the sharpest thing in there which was sissors i started the water and took all my cloths off i stepped in the water which was steaming hot which was perfect i started light then i went deep in my skin the more i went the more i cried i decided to make a heart then its no more love its a heart love so i got the idea to make a broken heart.Then the bell rang for 5mins to get to class



6 Comments
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that bad already let me guess shouldnt make chapter 2 yet
It's not bad, just be careful of grammar, and whenever a character is talking try writing it with quotation marks, like "So how was your summer you two?" Asked Beth,
It will be a lot easier for your readers to understand that way.
Hope I could help. :)
yea i probally should lol
it's good i just am speechless
this is good. but you seriously need paragraphs!! new paragraphs when someone is talking and when something new happens.