hold my hand ( a true story)
a story about love , friends,pain,lose
chracters:
eliza:brown haired;blue eyes, main chracter
lola:elizas best friend,red hair and brown eyes
mark:elizas bf,blonde
i climed on bed thinkin about mark today he asked me out i went on a date with him it was so cool i had akiss but it was wonderful anyway i fell asleep dreaming about him i woke up nextday washed my face got ready for school when i enterted the school mark came from the back caught my waist and told me"hi honey" "hi" i said back hen he walked away it was along day after all i went home wih lola after saying goodbye to mark"so lola want come sleepover tonight" mi said "sure"lola said when we got home we did homework and when my parents came back from work mam said to me'baby your dad is taking me out tonight promise me youll ba a good girl" "i promise" i said my parents got out me and lola started to listen to music we danced like crazy it was 10:00 pm "i think they got a little late " i thoght then i had a phone call "is this eliza watman" yes thts me "your parents are at hospital can somebody pick you here"what why are they there" its a car acident sorry" tears fell from my eyes and i hang up i went runin to lola she called mark to pick us up cause i couldnt speak we arrived at the hospital and i ran to the doctor he said" your mam is fine she got out with a few scratches but your dad sorry my girl his brain got a lot damged" i cryed for a while but i wanted to check mam so the doctor took me to her room she was awake
" hey mam how are you" "fine my dear look i dont want you to get sad its okay dont cry" i had to go so i got out of her room and went o the doctor"yuo can stay with your mother tonight if you wanted" he said next day i woke and went to the doctoer again he said " i am sorry to tell you that but your father died yesterday at 2:00 am"the tears fell from my eyes like rivers after 4 days i got over but i was stell hurted the doctors that my mam can go out from hospital i took her and we went home mark picked us up lola was waiting at the door" hey miss watmean are you okay" she said "i am fine" mam said mark checked on me on the pohne and he even came to vistit us everyday days passed everything seemed so fine
" hey mam how are you" "fine my dear look i dont want you to get sad its okay dont cry" i had to go so i got out of her room and went o the doctor"yuo can stay with your mother tonight if you wanted" he said next day i woke and went to the doctoer again he said " i am sorry to tell you that but your father died yesterday at 2:00 am"the tears fell from my eyes like rivers after 4 days i got over but i was stell hurted the doctors that my mam can go out from hospital i took her and we went home mark picked us up lola was waiting at the door" hey miss watmean are you okay" she said "i am fine" mam said mark checked on me on the pohne and he even came to vistit us everyday days passed everything seemed so fine
11 Comments
Can't wait to find out what will happen! :)
earia did you rad anything or nothing apaered
I'm reading the second chapter. Why?
It's the same? O_o
i did it twice cause when wrote 2it dint show it anyway i am working on chapter 2
Oh... Chapter 2 is nice too! Go on! :D
Nice :) Continue!
Advice:
It's kind of difficult to read it. It'll be easier if you diveded it in paragraphs and generally if it was more seperated. :)
okay
same i had difficult readin it 2 but other than tht it was MEGA can't wait till the next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XD :D :))
o hope you like th enew chapter
o hope you like th enew chapter