Sparkling Black
Okay, this used to be called Elemental Jedenfall. That was a work-in-progress title. XD Sparkling Black was the name of the first chapter, and I was searching for a new name, so....BAM! I thought Sparkling Black is a brilliant title. So that's what it is now. :)
Chapter 1
Prolouge: Colours of the Season
The black sparkled, and was intense against the burnt orange it lay beside. Night sky beside pumpkins. Hallows Even, the return of the Spirits, the night of Elements, summed up in those two colours.
The colours lifted, and slid over my head in a rustle of cloth. The majority of the fabric was the sparkling vivid black, and the edging and neckline were several inches of the vibrant orange. I swallowed, my heavily painted lips parting. The red on my mouth reminded me of vampire kisses, the red of the apples, ready for candying, the rich sweetness of the syrups, and the fall leaves drifting on the cool breezes.
I took a step forward, the black heels I had spent months practicing walking in thudding against the floor. Curls of my light brown hair hit the back of my neck. The skirt that dragged out for several yards and ended in a sharp point tugged against my legs. Pale fingers brushed over the satiny black skirt. Another step. I blinked, my eyelids nearly sticking together with all the decoration they wore. Another step. The heels thudded, the skirt pulled, and the jingle of copper wire from my earrings trembled on my earlobes.
The great wooden doors opened before me as I continued to take steps forward, carefully measured, slowly executed.
I continued down the orange runner on the stone floor, one heavy step at a time. The hundreds of people there bowed and curtsied, even knelt as I passed by. The sound of harpstrings filled the air, though the jingle of my earrings was still louder.
I lifted my hand, the dark red of my nails stark against my pale fingers and the black cloth I wore. I watched as my hand slid into his hand, warm and large. Wide, hard, comforting. A soft smile was directed at me, and I saw his brown eyes. I could not smile back, though I should. Taking the final steps, I stood beside him, and faced forward.
He wore black, with the orange edging. Black boots encased his feet, rising up to his kneecaps, shiny shiny black leather.
I could only hear my light breath, gently huffing through my lips, as the words were said, and our hands were joined. A cloth of orange with intricate blackwork was laid over our clasped hands, and the final sentence rang out with finality.
As the cheers went up, I turned to face the crowd, my hand caught in his, and we began the long walk back down the aisle together. Step by thudding step.
The skirt pulled, the black sparkled, the earrings jingled, and curls repeatedly hit the back of my neck.
But none of it mattered. All of it registered dimly, as through a haze.
I was married to a man I knew nothing about.
The colours lifted, and slid over my head in a rustle of cloth. The majority of the fabric was the sparkling vivid black, and the edging and neckline were several inches of the vibrant orange. I swallowed, my heavily painted lips parting. The red on my mouth reminded me of vampire kisses, the red of the apples, ready for candying, the rich sweetness of the syrups, and the fall leaves drifting on the cool breezes.
I took a step forward, the black heels I had spent months practicing walking in thudding against the floor. Curls of my light brown hair hit the back of my neck. The skirt that dragged out for several yards and ended in a sharp point tugged against my legs. Pale fingers brushed over the satiny black skirt. Another step. I blinked, my eyelids nearly sticking together with all the decoration they wore. Another step. The heels thudded, the skirt pulled, and the jingle of copper wire from my earrings trembled on my earlobes.
The great wooden doors opened before me as I continued to take steps forward, carefully measured, slowly executed.
I continued down the orange runner on the stone floor, one heavy step at a time. The hundreds of people there bowed and curtsied, even knelt as I passed by. The sound of harpstrings filled the air, though the jingle of my earrings was still louder.
I lifted my hand, the dark red of my nails stark against my pale fingers and the black cloth I wore. I watched as my hand slid into his hand, warm and large. Wide, hard, comforting. A soft smile was directed at me, and I saw his brown eyes. I could not smile back, though I should. Taking the final steps, I stood beside him, and faced forward.
He wore black, with the orange edging. Black boots encased his feet, rising up to his kneecaps, shiny shiny black leather.
I could only hear my light breath, gently huffing through my lips, as the words were said, and our hands were joined. A cloth of orange with intricate blackwork was laid over our clasped hands, and the final sentence rang out with finality.
As the cheers went up, I turned to face the crowd, my hand caught in his, and we began the long walk back down the aisle together. Step by thudding step.
The skirt pulled, the black sparkled, the earrings jingled, and curls repeatedly hit the back of my neck.
But none of it mattered. All of it registered dimly, as through a haze.
I was married to a man I knew nothing about.



77 Comments
Please do give suggestions for:
The name of the story,
Her name
His name.
I need them all!!
Completely strange, but if you read this while listening to Waiting for a Train from the Inception soundtrack, it's brilliant. Just the kind of feel I was going for. :) Course, I've only gotten 2:16 into it, so the music could change drastically by the end, but those beginning two minutes with this chapter is awesome. :D
Wow. That's all I can say. I can't even think
Is it that bad, then? I kept rewriting it, but this just hit me....I can change it, I suppose....
No, it's not bad. It's really good. I'm just braindead right now
It's so good! I love it! Please continue! If you need names, go to www.20000-names.com, they have a lot there! For example, if you click special names, you can choose a list with name meaning, like Light, Magic, Evil, etc! Please continue!
That is good. And for names, well, I find it easier to think of scenes the character will be in, to learn his or her personality, and then give a name. But that's just what works for me. I can't really give very good name suggestions if I know nothing about the character. But I guess you could use:
Falco (meaning Falcon, though I guess that's given)
Zenos (meaning stranger. It's probably my favorite name and since he's a stranger to her that could work for him...)
And I can't think of anything.
REALLY, SUPER, AMAZINGLY, AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!
their names should be something that no one else has. something that is made up or hasnt been used in a very long time. i think that might work..... shrugs
What do you think of the name Nicholas? I might be using it for one of the characters.
me like :) lol :)
Your writing is very professional like a good writers should be! ^.^
Wow, thank you so much!!!!
I love it! Sad though, like you said... Poor, poor Oliver!
awwww i can totally tell Oliver loves Autumn and yes i know he is her personal gurad but still :)
but its also sad because she has an arranged marriage :(
oops spelled guard wrong lol :D
Yay, you picked up on it! I didn't know if I was being too obvious or not hinting enough. :D
nope u can tell :) and if anyone doesnt pick up on it READ MY COMMENT!! lol :)
Haha, I knew too, but I decided not to be a party pooper :p I loved it, once again!
awwwwwwwwwwww :( oliver and autumn need to get married not matthew whats his face... :(
i feel bad for her