New Beginnings
This is my little experiment. It's my first ever story on Quibblo and any advice would be much appreciated. Thanks everyone and I hope this doesn't suck too much ;) Wish me luck!
Name: Rebecca Harley
Hair: Wavey blond, shoulder length
Eye colour: Blue/grey
Age: 22
Chapter 1
Diamonds
So I was standing on my doorstep, turning the key in the lock, and everything that has happened in the past few months just came crashing down. I had barely made it inside before I completly collapsed on the hardwood floor. It was just too much. No normal person should have to deal with the things I have. I lay there for God knows how long, my face pressed againt the cold floor, sobbing. It was an ugly sight but I didn't care. I didn't care about anything anymore. Stuff this! Stuff life! I was pretty sure I didn't even want to live. How could I keep....whoa, stopping that thought right there. No way was I going there again. Lets just say I'd been there, done that, bought the t-shirt, out-grown it and givin it to the op shop.
Sighing, I pushed myself into a sitting position and attempted to dry my eyes without smudging my mascara. I sat there for a some time, thinking about how to move my legs. Finally I figure dthat I really should get up. I stood and as I did so, I caught a glimps of myself in the mirror hanging on the wall. I liked that mirror. It was a nice mirror. It was probably older than I was and was givin to me on my 18th birthday from...nope, stopped that thought too. I shuddered and strode towards the mirror, grabed it and threw it across the room at the opposite wall. Pleasure rippled though me as I watched it smash, as I watched it fall from the wall where I had thrown it like a thousand twinkling diamonds. I smiled bitterly as I watched it lying on the ground, shattered and broken, just like me. I stepped over the glittering mess, stray pieces of glass crunching under my heels, and walked though my house towards my bedroom. I slipped off my heels and curled up under the covers of my bed and once again broke down. As I lay there, slowly sinking into unconsciousness, I thought of him. Of how we used to be, of how he used to hold me tight, of the good days.
A/N: Sorry for the short chapter but I'm just trying a few things out. I'm not sure if I should keep going with this so please comment and maybe give some advice if you would like. :D Thank you for reading guys!
Sighing, I pushed myself into a sitting position and attempted to dry my eyes without smudging my mascara. I sat there for a some time, thinking about how to move my legs. Finally I figure dthat I really should get up. I stood and as I did so, I caught a glimps of myself in the mirror hanging on the wall. I liked that mirror. It was a nice mirror. It was probably older than I was and was givin to me on my 18th birthday from...nope, stopped that thought too. I shuddered and strode towards the mirror, grabed it and threw it across the room at the opposite wall. Pleasure rippled though me as I watched it smash, as I watched it fall from the wall where I had thrown it like a thousand twinkling diamonds. I smiled bitterly as I watched it lying on the ground, shattered and broken, just like me. I stepped over the glittering mess, stray pieces of glass crunching under my heels, and walked though my house towards my bedroom. I slipped off my heels and curled up under the covers of my bed and once again broke down. As I lay there, slowly sinking into unconsciousness, I thought of him. Of how we used to be, of how he used to hold me tight, of the good days.
A/N: Sorry for the short chapter but I'm just trying a few things out. I'm not sure if I should keep going with this so please comment and maybe give some advice if you would like. :D Thank you for reading guys!



23 Comments
Really good:):):) keepmwriting:)
Thank you :D
No prob:)
oh no, anothher story i'm getting addicted to!
MORE! MORE! MORE!
And quickly too! :p
oh no, anothher story i'm getting addicted to!
MORE! MORE! MORE!
And quickly too! :p
love it amanda, can't wait for the next chapter! Keep going! :D
Hahaha thanks guys! You make me blush :)
I'd like to see that!! XD
Oh my gosh, loving the new chapter amanda!!! :D NEXT!!! ♥♥♥
You should really try to get this published. I've seen paid authors who can't write this good. Look into it. Nothing would make me happier :)
Thank you that's really nice! :D
KEEP Writing! PLZ
Wow! That is one good story! Especially if it's your first story!