My Immortal--My Commentary
Who's heard of My Immortal by Tara The-oh-so-charming Gilesbie...or something like that?
If you have, prepare to read it again, except I'm going to be interrupting this beautful work of art (yeah, right) with boldness.
Literally.
WARNING!
This writing ay contain mature language, slaughter of the English language, severe stereotyping and an air of Twilight.
Please take full precaussions when reading this story. I should not be held responsible for any deaths that may occur.
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) That's absolutely hilarious, I'm dying from the fail--ness of this joke. 2 my gf (ew not in that way) You said it, not me. raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. looks like it didn't work out so well... U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! I feel sorry for this kid... MCR ROX! Yes they do, but they must be dying a little inside to be dragged into this train-wreck.
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way Hey, I'm Indigo Sunshine'ness Uncontrollia Owl Road, nice to meet you! and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back You were BORN with all this?! and icy blue eyes like limpid limpid means clear...FAIL tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) Okay, bye!. I'm not related to Gerard Way Thank god for that but I wish I was because he's a major bleep hottie But then he'd be your relative...you can't call him hot. I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white Oh, I wonder what THAT sounds like. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch unfortunately, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England Scotland! Stupid. where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen) No! Really?!. I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) Of cource I could! I mean, you DID tell us you have ebony hair and blue eyes...totally goth! Stupid, yet again and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots ...come again?. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow And you so don't look fake. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me 'ZOMG BECAUSE IM SO BEAUTIFUL!. I put up my middle finger at them. Like you put up a tent.
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy! Le gasp!
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly. Draco Malfoy. Shy. Yeah, right!
But then, I heard my friends what friends? call me and I had to go away.
AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz!
ZOMG YESH! It soooo gooooddddd! I luvre itt!
Please die.
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Well now that I have burned quite a few brain cells of yours, have a good day.
Or night.
Hi my name is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way Hey, I'm Indigo Sunshine'ness Uncontrollia Owl Road, nice to meet you! and I have long ebony black hair (that's how I got my name) with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back You were BORN with all this?! and icy blue eyes like limpid limpid means clear...FAIL tears and a lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) Okay, bye!. I'm not related to Gerard Way Thank god for that but I wish I was because he's a major bleep hottie But then he'd be your relative...you can't call him hot. I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white Oh, I wonder what THAT sounds like. I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch unfortunately, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England Scotland! Stupid. where I'm in the seventh year (I'm seventeen) No! Really?!. I'm a goth (in case you couldn't tell) Of cource I could! I mean, you DID tell us you have ebony hair and blue eyes...totally goth! Stupid, yet again and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it and a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots ...come again?. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow And you so don't look fake. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me 'ZOMG BECAUSE IM SO BEAUTIFUL!. I put up my middle finger at them. Like you put up a tent.
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was…. Draco Malfoy! Le gasp!
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly. Draco Malfoy. Shy. Yeah, right!
But then, I heard my friends what friends? call me and I had to go away.
AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz!
ZOMG YESH! It soooo gooooddddd! I luvre itt!
Please die.
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Well now that I have burned quite a few brain cells of yours, have a good day.
Or night.
56 Comments
Always leave these commentaries to the professionals. xD NICE WORK!
Haha, I'm a pro except you don't know that fellow pro!
Lmao, nice! I'm grinning here! (Until you start with my story, that is.. :p)
Hah, no, You're stories are too awesome!
Thanks :D
Nice! I have read a lot of My Immortal stories with commentary and a lot of the same jokes, remarks, angered/insulted responses to something that Tara says are reused... Your version has a lot of things that cracked me up. Nice! Keep going, but don't murder your brain. :)
LOL MAN, this is awesome. CONTINUEEEE, because Tara OBVIOUSLY thinks that she's a genius (PPPFFFT XD) by writing this. PLEASE man, the best one was when you wrote stupid. I don't know why - but it cracks me up EVERY time XD
LOL OMG...wait for it...
STOOOOPPIIIIDDD.
Ah god, I miss saying that.
My brain... I think it just died a little. It would have died completely had your commentary not been so brilliant.
BAHAHAHAHA THIS IS HILARIOUS!!!!! CONTINUE DOING THIS TO OTHER HORRIBLE STORIES OUT THERE, PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
LMFAO! MORE PLEASE! OH I LOVE HOW U PUT UR THOUGHTS ON THIS! LMFAO! MORE PLZ! XD
That is so bad I can't believe some one actually asked for compliments for it!! Love the commentary though! You actually stopped my brain from dying too much XD
God I love My Immortal. I remember when I read it the first time XD
Have you watched any of the video commentaries or dramatic readings if this on YouTube? They're the best!
Oh my god, no I haven't. There's stuff like that on youtube? I'm so checking it out.
I love the commentary. i read the original and I think i lost some IQ points or brain cells! LOL for the commentary!! :D