A Nightmare Come True (An Original Story)
This is Max's worse nightmare, come true. Max is 13, and his sweet loving mom died when he was 7. His father abuses him. Max always has nightmares. Though Max does not now it, his nightmare is one to come true.
Please correct my mistakes!!
Max ran into his room panting. He was running from his father, who was drunk ... Again. Max slammed the door as hard as he could a locked the door. He checked his pockets for the key to his room. He didn't have it. His dad had access to his room. Max went to hide in his closet, but the door swung open. His father walked over to Max. Max's father lifted his hand, and struck him. Max blacked out on the spot.
Of course, Max had a nightmare. He always does. This nightmare was going to come true, though he didn't know it. And this nightmare, was his worst nightmare of all. His nightmare, went like this,
Max awoke to a very loud yelp. The yelp of his beloved dog, Rusty. His dog was very sweet and the only one in his family who wasn't constantly trying to hit him. Max loved his dog more than anything. He ran out to see Rusty with a knife sticking out of his paw.
"Rusty!!!!" Max shouted, bolting over to him. His father appeared from the shadows.
"You... You did this didn't you?" His father gave an evil laugh and bellowed,
"Of course! And you're next!!" His dad held up a knife and took a step toward Max.
Of course, Max had a nightmare. He always does. This nightmare was going to come true, though he didn't know it. And this nightmare, was his worst nightmare of all. His nightmare, went like this,
Max awoke to a very loud yelp. The yelp of his beloved dog, Rusty. His dog was very sweet and the only one in his family who wasn't constantly trying to hit him. Max loved his dog more than anything. He ran out to see Rusty with a knife sticking out of his paw.
"Rusty!!!!" Max shouted, bolting over to him. His father appeared from the shadows.
"You... You did this didn't you?" His father gave an evil laugh and bellowed,
"Of course! And you're next!!" His dad held up a knife and took a step toward Max.
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Awesome C! Awesome!
Awesome
Awesome! Very good grammar, the only two things I can remark are:
You said: His nightmare happen like, while it would be more proper to put: This is how his nightmare went:
And "next comes you". It would sound better to say "And you're next."
But who am I to correct you? This story is awesome!! Please continue!
Thank you!!
Totally awesome C!
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