A Pokemon Journey
Ravyn Moon'light Rybbon Shine woke up to the blaring of her alarm clock. "AH! I'm late!" Ravyn umped out of bed. She quickly got dressed in a purple tank top, a black miniskirt, purple and black fingerless gloves, and purple and black striped leg warmers. She pullen on a black leather jacket ans examined herself in the mirror. A thin milky skinned figure stared back at her, with violet and sapphire orbs and long waist length onyx hair with natural plum streaks. She grabbed a shining necklace off her dresser and slipped it over her head, the azure stone resting on her chest.
FLASHVACK
A seven year old Ravyn played in the forest by her house. It was dangerous, but she didn't mind. She had practiced sword fighting since she could talk. Picking oran berries off an orange leaved bush, Ravyn heard a rustle, and turned sharply around. There stood a Ninetales, with the amulet resting in its mouth. She dropped it at Ravyn's feet and bounded away.
NO MORE FLASHBACK.
Ravyn ran to the Professer's house to get her Pokemon. when she entered, there were no more of the red and white spheres on the table.
"Oh, no..." Ravyn whimpered.
Tell me wat you think! I don't mind flaming, or any negative opinions!
FLASHVACK
A seven year old Ravyn played in the forest by her house. It was dangerous, but she didn't mind. She had practiced sword fighting since she could talk. Picking oran berries off an orange leaved bush, Ravyn heard a rustle, and turned sharply around. There stood a Ninetales, with the amulet resting in its mouth. She dropped it at Ravyn's feet and bounded away.
NO MORE FLASHBACK.
Ravyn ran to the Professer's house to get her Pokemon. when she entered, there were no more of the red and white spheres on the table.
"Oh, no..." Ravyn whimpered.
Tell me wat you think! I don't mind flaming, or any negative opinions!
11 Comments
Cool! :D I love this, though you can italize (Sp?) the flashbacks. :) Just put / on both sides of the words you want to italize.... If you dunno. :D
I know how to italicize, it's just I'm doing something a bit... different here.
Good so far! Make more! :3
LOL Cool :D Were you in a rush to make this?
No.
I took a very long time writing it.
Spelling could be improved a little and you could describe events a little bit more. Otherwise I can't really think of anything.
Thanks! I'll certainly use this!
Oh :P Cause a few of the letters are missing, if you noticed that. But anything else but that, it was a nice story so far!
First time, it's 'Flashvack'. xD
Also, there could be a bit more space between each paragraph, it just feels...cramped. D:
More description, and the story would be really nice. ^.^
Wow. I mean wow. This story just sucker-punched me in a metaphorically awesome way.