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The fire danced in your eyes that night we lay together under the stars.the night we ran through the forests till we fell to the ground in kisses.the nightwe dived into a lake of reflected sky and spun around beneath a mountain of snow.

But as dawn came you were snatched from my arms and pulled from my hart.I no not to love the night or regret it.those creatures of the night pulled you away in their grasp and I will come for you.I will hunt you down to the ends of the earth even if I die on the way.

My love, I'm coming for you.....

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The wind whipped up in mighty gusts around me.It lifted my cape up in great swirls.the silver stallion pawed nervously underneath me.the rolling hills gave away to a dark forest.a forest filled with secrets best kept hidden.

The sword across my back gleamed in the setting sun as i prepared to go after her...

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The grunts and growls broke through my illusion.yet again I was chained to the tree in the center of their camp.my dress was frayed and covered in mud and my chest was barely covered.my satin black hair cascaded down and around my shoulders.I twisted ny hands in the iron locks and grittedy teeth as the old scabs reopened.

A wendigo like creature near me with a furry hide and saliva dripping muzzle inhaled through huge nostrils.its eyes narrowed to slits and it shifted near me smelling te fresh blood.what I had learned in bieng here for the past few days was to scream when in trouble.their kings men was always ready to come to my aid. I was. To valuable.

"help!" I wailed.a knight leaning against a tree turned to me.his dark armor shifted in color with his surroundings.he hit the wendigo on the side of its monstrous head as a slim elf came up.

Out of the two types of elf this was the evil one.her long ebony hair fell down around her white face.red eyes watched with a cruel smile."the king would like you in his quarters" she sneeres.the kinght hauled me up and pulled me along the crowded camp past creatures of every horror.

I am annabeth.my father is king of sumaria.I was meant to marry a wealthy prince from a foreign land but I was in love with someone already.his name is aden.he could never marry me him bieng a knight and me bieng a princess.

So we ran away.but that night as we danced under the moon I was snatched away.th creatures of the night as my people called them were evil beings.some say their king is the devil himself.

I haven't been here long but iv hear snippets of conversation saying I was to be ransom for the kingdom and we were traviling to the dark kings castle.I still didn't know it all but I would find out soon.

The knight shoved me in the entrance to a huge tent and imy breath caught as I saw the king......

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