For People who read my "Forbidden Love" Story

Hullo all of you wonderful people. I know that the "Forbidden Love" Story was by far my most popular story on Quibblo. Now I'm making it better. I felt the need to really think and edit it. It's basically the same story, but now with more details and more dialogue in it. If you want to read it go for it, here's the done original version:
http://www.quibblo.com/quiz/d_qeQnJ/Forbidden-Love

Hullo all of you. I am almost done writing this! About 5 more chapters to write, then it shall be on, then if i get enough reads I'll make a second one. Who's excited?

~ Ariel