Junk of the Heart ~James and Lily~
Basically I was trying to find James adn Lily for the hell of it and didn't which probebly has something to do with more of my bad finding skills -I'm no Hufflepuff- than existance but you never know.
So here is James and Lily. Told from the brain of an egotistical marauder.
“No,” she told him for the millionth time today.
James was used to get rejected by her.
Lily Evans, the reason for his very existence. Her red hair, her emerald green eyes ready to make any guy stop dead and stare at her beauty. Her brilliant mind.
Great he’d lost his mind and turned into a swooning girl all because of Miss. Evans.
“Come on,” he said dashing up next to her. “One date.”
“Hmm let me just,” she stopped and turned to face him, thinking it over. Just for a second James got his hopes up. “NO!”
She sauntered away from him rushing off to join on her friends on the train.
“Oh yeah, she wants me,” James told himself while running a hand through his messing black hair.
He was sixteen years old and still could never manage to get the girl of his dreams.
Maybe next year would be an improvement.
I’m not exactly a first chapter person but hopefully it wasn’t completely crap.
James was used to get rejected by her.
Lily Evans, the reason for his very existence. Her red hair, her emerald green eyes ready to make any guy stop dead and stare at her beauty. Her brilliant mind.
Great he’d lost his mind and turned into a swooning girl all because of Miss. Evans.
“Come on,” he said dashing up next to her. “One date.”
“Hmm let me just,” she stopped and turned to face him, thinking it over. Just for a second James got his hopes up. “NO!”
She sauntered away from him rushing off to join on her friends on the train.
“Oh yeah, she wants me,” James told himself while running a hand through his messing black hair.
He was sixteen years old and still could never manage to get the girl of his dreams.
Maybe next year would be an improvement.
I’m not exactly a first chapter person but hopefully it wasn’t completely crap.
26 Comments
It was good just make it longer and write chapter two!
thanks
That totally sounds like James he gets rejected and takes it as a complement.
thanks! I'm not really good at being guy mind...so thanks for that comment
Next please! That's really funny, about next year being better; so James.....
haha thanks
omg, really good. you shuld make more.! :)
thanks
I love it! Next chapter asap please! =D
Love this! James is such and idiot, but it's kind of endearing.
haha thanks
This is really brilliant. A word of advice: Maybe you should work on the grammar, this being said in a nice way, obviously.
Great plot!
I love it. :D
I ship James/Lily with all my heart.
I have a serious grammer problem no matter what I do hangs head in shame but I'll try and do some serious checking next time.
And thanks.
I've really started to as of late, like I always have but more so....
You could try getting a beta--I could be your beta. :D
aww poor jamsey, next one please!
YAY! another one! :D
Be all shiny happy. xD
Brilliant!
haha thanks
how exactly does one beta? Sounds like a good idea to me though
Oh, the thing is:
After yoou write a chapter, all you have to do is send your work to someone. They help the writer with flaws in the story--obviously they're not allowed to post it without the author's permission. The beta's have to send it back to the author and the author can make any corrections that they want to.
And then BOOM. :D