LET'S PUT MY OCs INTO DIFFERENT FRANCHISES AND SEE WHAT HAPPENS
Yup. Franchises are: Hunger Games, Portal, Pokemon. Incredible randomness and insanity follows as my OCs are thrust into the world of their video games and novels.
YOU HAVVE BEEN WARNED.
"AAAAAHHHH." Denver shrieked emotionlessly. He was splayed across a metal table. He sat up and looked around.
"THIS IS NOT MY HOME. MY HOME IS A VICTORIAN HOUSE IN [INFORMATION CONFIDENTIAL AS THE AUTHOR NEVER TRULY FIGURED THIS OUT]." Denver looked at his wrist where a barcode and the Capitol's emblem was tatttooed. He stared at in thought, wondering why he was in Panem and what he was supposed to be doing.
"Ah. The Muttation's awake." A Gamemaker walked over to him. "How are you?"
"I SEEM TO HAVE WOKEN UP IN A PLACE I DISTINCTLY REMEBER NOT FALLING ASLEEP IN." He ruffled his wings, stiff from his weight on them. "WHY WAS I LYING DOWN LIKE A HUMAN. MY WINGS HURT."
The Gamemaker walked over to a scientist who was checking Denver's vital signs on a nearby monitor. "He looks fine. But what's wrong with his voice? There's no inflection and he speaks very formally."
"The mockingjay can mimic humans but cannot speak. When we created a semi-human mockingjay, his speech centers must have been affected." The bioengineer explained nasally.
"I AM NOT A MOCKINGJAY," Denver called over. "I AM A CROW." his eyes were opaque for a split second, then reverted to their blank white as he blinked. He spread out his wings for inspection, noting immediatley his primaries and down were a peppered grey.(I always imagined mockingjays black with white faces and grey inner wings.)
"Do you have a name?" The Gamemaker turned to the Mutt.
"DENVER. DENVER NEVADA."
"Okay, Denver. I'm Seneca Crane. You need you to go into the Hunger Games as a Tribute. Can you do that?"
"THE HUNGER GAMES. I HAVE TO KILL PEOPLE. TO WIN."
"Yes," Seneca confirmed.
Denver, in less than a second, has his knife in his hand and his eyes solid black.
"EASIER DONE THAN SAID."
Each story is going to update randomly. It might update chapters one after another, or might not at all for a while.
I want only constructive critisism in the comments. If it is only praise and not advice, don't type. If you don't find anything wrong because of your hilariously low expectations, at least specify a particular you like.
Denver talks in a monotone, so he speaks in all caps, not loudly.
"THIS IS NOT MY HOME. MY HOME IS A VICTORIAN HOUSE IN [INFORMATION CONFIDENTIAL AS THE AUTHOR NEVER TRULY FIGURED THIS OUT]." Denver looked at his wrist where a barcode and the Capitol's emblem was tatttooed. He stared at in thought, wondering why he was in Panem and what he was supposed to be doing.
"Ah. The Muttation's awake." A Gamemaker walked over to him. "How are you?"
"I SEEM TO HAVE WOKEN UP IN A PLACE I DISTINCTLY REMEBER NOT FALLING ASLEEP IN." He ruffled his wings, stiff from his weight on them. "WHY WAS I LYING DOWN LIKE A HUMAN. MY WINGS HURT."
The Gamemaker walked over to a scientist who was checking Denver's vital signs on a nearby monitor. "He looks fine. But what's wrong with his voice? There's no inflection and he speaks very formally."
"The mockingjay can mimic humans but cannot speak. When we created a semi-human mockingjay, his speech centers must have been affected." The bioengineer explained nasally.
"I AM NOT A MOCKINGJAY," Denver called over. "I AM A CROW." his eyes were opaque for a split second, then reverted to their blank white as he blinked. He spread out his wings for inspection, noting immediatley his primaries and down were a peppered grey.(I always imagined mockingjays black with white faces and grey inner wings.)
"Do you have a name?" The Gamemaker turned to the Mutt.
"DENVER. DENVER NEVADA."
"Okay, Denver. I'm Seneca Crane. You need you to go into the Hunger Games as a Tribute. Can you do that?"
"THE HUNGER GAMES. I HAVE TO KILL PEOPLE. TO WIN."
"Yes," Seneca confirmed.
Denver, in less than a second, has his knife in his hand and his eyes solid black.
"EASIER DONE THAN SAID."
Each story is going to update randomly. It might update chapters one after another, or might not at all for a while.
I want only constructive critisism in the comments. If it is only praise and not advice, don't type. If you don't find anything wrong because of your hilariously low expectations, at least specify a particular you like.
Denver talks in a monotone, so he speaks in all caps, not loudly.
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That was rather entertaining. I quite liked it.
Now, some constructive criticism: The last sentence switched to present tense. You might want to fix that, seeing as the rest of it is past tense and all. Also, if you ask me, he doesn't sound that formal. He just doesn't use contractions. Just an observation. And shouldn't it be "WHY WAS I LYING DOWN LIKE A HUMAN?" Instead of a period, use an exclamation point.
Denver's monotone resricts inflection on his voice, including making sentences into questions. It's a writing tool.
Thank you for the constructive critisism. I am a lazy s.o.b and you will find it correct in about a week. I truly appriciate the help. :D
Yes, he does talk formally most time, it simply doesn't show much here. He is usually very polite in speech and mannerisms, this is not really a circumstance where it would apply.
"The mockingjay can mimic humans but cannot speak. When we created a semi-human mockingjay, his speech centers must have been affected." The bioengineer explained nasally.
You should have put a comma at the end of the quotation and the "The" shouldn't be capitalized.
"I AM A CROW." his eyes were opaque for a split second...
Just capitalize the "his" and you'll be fine.
I believe that's it on the grammar front. Otherwise, this is quite interesting. I can't wait to see the others.
"So I herd you liek things." Nozo said with a skeptical look.
LOL.
Heh. Ponies.
Haha, ponies. XD