Hello Or Goodbye? original story
hey guys, so ive been writing thjis story for my friend aideen and wanted to see wat eveeryone thought
the grammar paragraphs and chapters dont make any sense but the story does so read it please and tell me what you think :D throughout the story it switches from two different point of views. Two sisters Evelynn (Ev) and Faye
Grainne xx
ev's veiw
I looked out at the azure sea and watched as the sun danced across it. I heard the waves crashing against the bottom of the cliff beneath me. I closed my eyes and inhaled the glorious salty smell that hung in the air. The call of my name interrupted my thoughts. Again I heard it,'Evelynn!' It was Faye. I could sense the panic in her voice as she ran toward me. Her sandy brown hair clung to her pale sweaty face. 'Evelynn, what are you doing?' I couldn't look at her. I had made up my mind. Faye would only try to change it, say i was stupid, selfish. She's always been controlling. Just because she's five minutes older she thinks she's all that. 'Ev?' She grabbed my wrist. I pulled free and took that step. That step too far. everything rushed past my eyes in a blue blur. The last things I remember were the faint callings of Faye in the distance. I was falling, falling, falling. And now? I'm trapped
I looked out at the azure sea and watched as the sun danced across it. I heard the waves crashing against the bottom of the cliff beneath me. I closed my eyes and inhaled the glorious salty smell that hung in the air. The call of my name interrupted my thoughts. Again I heard it,'Evelynn!' It was Faye. I could sense the panic in her voice as she ran toward me. Her sandy brown hair clung to her pale sweaty face. 'Evelynn, what are you doing?' I couldn't look at her. I had made up my mind. Faye would only try to change it, say i was stupid, selfish. She's always been controlling. Just because she's five minutes older she thinks she's all that. 'Ev?' She grabbed my wrist. I pulled free and took that step. That step too far. everything rushed past my eyes in a blue blur. The last things I remember were the faint callings of Faye in the distance. I was falling, falling, falling. And now? I'm trapped
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I love it :) next chapter!!!