Twilight: Re-done, Re-written, The Right Way
Quick Note! I absolutely hated Twilight, so I'm gonna re-write it, with a good Vampire story, proper developing feelings, proper reactions towards things, (Like being scared when your crush is a vampire, duh) and deep characters.
Jacob will stay relatively the same throughout the story.
I'd never thought much about how I would die. I always thought I was much too young for such thoughts. But over the last few months, fear took over my mind, and made me think of the many things that could happen if I wasn't careful.
I held my breath as I looked across the room, into the dark eyes of my killer, and he smiled gruesomely at me.
I thought of how I had risked everything for something that was absolutely hopeless, and became angry at myself. My stupidity got me here, and there was nothing I could do to escape it.
I knew if I had never done my mother that favour, never came to Forks, I wouldn't be facing death this early in life. But, deep in my mind, I knew I couldn't regret my decision. If weren't for my decision, I would have never met him.
The hunter gave one last smile before he sauntered forward to kill me.
I held my breath as I looked across the room, into the dark eyes of my killer, and he smiled gruesomely at me.
I thought of how I had risked everything for something that was absolutely hopeless, and became angry at myself. My stupidity got me here, and there was nothing I could do to escape it.
I knew if I had never done my mother that favour, never came to Forks, I wouldn't be facing death this early in life. But, deep in my mind, I knew I couldn't regret my decision. If weren't for my decision, I would have never met him.
The hunter gave one last smile before he sauntered forward to kill me.
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love it!
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I LOVE the idea!!! I really want to read this now!!! An actual GOOD Twilight would be so refreshing!!! :) Can't wait for the next!!!
I know. I’m sorry I haven’t been updating. I’m writing a novel, and I’m a YouTube addict. XD
Finished the second chapter, but its a part 1 and 2 thing so I could update faster. :)
Oooh yay!!! :)
I dunno about Davin, I've never actually heard that name before! Do you know anyone with that name?
Actually, it’s my book character’s name :D
I know, I just sort of prefer Edward. Call me picky, I just do. shrugs
Wow! This is awesome! (I really don't like twilight, so this is awesome for me; "I have been here every night... Watching you sleep..." "Oh, that's so romantic!" no, it's stalkerish.) this is going on my favorites, definitely. Five stars.
Well I see the grammar hasn't really improved from the book either. But hopefully it'll get good.
-R