Elves
So I love elves and decided to write s story about them. I had some inspiration from 'The Hobbit' which I just saw (it was awesome!).
Xander's POV
"She's in this town," Cillian said pointing to a town on the map.
"Glenwood? Isn't that a very poor town?" I asked.
"She doesn't know," Cillian explained.
"Oh," I answered, "I'll need a poor looking horse then."
"Already planned," Cillian said handing me the map.We walked down to the stables.
"This is your horse," Cillian said showing me to a brown horse than was covered in dirt and mud. His hair looked terrible yet he was still the most gorgeous horse ever. His muscles were tense under his skin for he was eager to run.
I rubbed his neck, "Come on." I mounted him and put the map into his saddlebag.
I clucked then said, "Let's go Vaughn." He raced out of the stables and we were on our way to find the mysterious Elvin girl.
"She's in this town," Cillian said pointing to a town on the map.
"Glenwood? Isn't that a very poor town?" I asked.
"She doesn't know," Cillian explained.
"Oh," I answered, "I'll need a poor looking horse then."
"Already planned," Cillian said handing me the map.We walked down to the stables.
"This is your horse," Cillian said showing me to a brown horse than was covered in dirt and mud. His hair looked terrible yet he was still the most gorgeous horse ever. His muscles were tense under his skin for he was eager to run.
I rubbed his neck, "Come on." I mounted him and put the map into his saddlebag.
I clucked then said, "Let's go Vaughn." He raced out of the stables and we were on our way to find the mysterious Elvin girl.
38 Comments
Short
It's just a preview :)
cool!
Then good
Oh my gosh, you saw The Hobbit? Its awesome, I saw it recently too :)
By the way, interesting start to the story.
Thank you :)
OMG! I have a friend names Xander! how funny!
Cool, i love elves too :)
It's an interesting start!
It is very good so far... cant wait for more :)
It's quite good! The first chapter was a bit vague, as there wasn't really any explanation whatsoever regarding when and why they were going to find some girl who happened to be an elf. The second chapter was a bit better, but there wasn't really any background information except for one short, non-descriptive sentence.
Enough of my nitpicking, though! Well done.
This gets more interesting as it goes on 😊