Falling Down (an original story)
Eh, you'll have to read it to find out what it's about (:
Inspired by Donald Liu, a true hero.
We were lying on the soft, emerald grass of the backyard, listening to the explosion of angry voices booming from the small, rickety house.
"I am not overreacting! Tell me where you were last night." I could hear Mom's voice clearly, wishing I couldn't.
I glance at my 8 year-old little sister, Robin briefly. Her mousy brown hair was tucked behind her ear, revealing the grim expression pasted on her face.
"Dustin?" She turned her head to face me, her dark green eyes filled with indignation.
"Yeah?" I ask warily.
"I heard Mom and Dad talking last night," She gulped before continuing. "And they're getting a..."
"A what?" But she didn't even bother finishing her sentence, because in an instant I knew what she was trying to say.
My heart sank to my faded, gray high-top Converse.
My parents were getting a divorce.
"I am not overreacting! Tell me where you were last night." I could hear Mom's voice clearly, wishing I couldn't.
I glance at my 8 year-old little sister, Robin briefly. Her mousy brown hair was tucked behind her ear, revealing the grim expression pasted on her face.
"Dustin?" She turned her head to face me, her dark green eyes filled with indignation.
"Yeah?" I ask warily.
"I heard Mom and Dad talking last night," She gulped before continuing. "And they're getting a..."
"A what?" But she didn't even bother finishing her sentence, because in an instant I knew what she was trying to say.
My heart sank to my faded, gray high-top Converse.
My parents were getting a divorce.
37 Comments
This is amazing! Very well done. So Dustin is a player, who feels slightly guilty about his victims?
Thank you so much! Yes Dustin pretty much becomes a bad person in general.
This very good so far
And you develop your characters very nicely
Really? Thanks!! (:
Dustin is a bit.... :/
But amazing story!
Thank you! Yeah, I tried to make Dustin that kind of guy... You know what I mean (;
Yeah... XD I hope Dustin turns into that type of person that you grow to like... :D
I guess we'll find out sooner or later (;
:O What happened with his mum?
Oh God, what happened? D:
I love it! What happened to his mum? Please continue!
Thanks!!! I'll continue, I promise (:
AMAZING! AMAZING! AMAZING!
Yay I'm so glad you like it! ;D
Awh...:( That was so sad. Poor Robin...
I actually based her off a real person, which is what inspired me to write this story in the first place.
Oh, wow...Donald Liu?
Yeah, (;
Quibblo does that to me sometimes too.... hey, but good new chapter. His anger was very... real. WELL DONE!
Thank you! I was a little wrorried that his feelings wouldn't seem realistic enough!
this is amazing! i was disapointed when it ended!
omg thank you!! Haha (: