Planting Rosie
Rosie loves plants!
"Rosie!" My Mom called from the kitchen where she was making lunch. "You've been sitting on the couch reading all morning! Have you watered your plants yet?" I shoved my bookmark into my page in 'Smile' and sat bolt up. I ran through the backdoor and grabbed a watering can from my gardening cupboard on my deck. I hopped down the deck's steps, careful not to spill any water.
When I reached the bottom, I turned to the right into my garden. I watered my roses first, like always, and then my sunflowers, corn, tomatoes, radishes, and my violets. They looked as if they were drinking up the water as the soil absorbed the liquid.
I smiled and trotted back up my stairs and into the kitchen where my mom was waiting for me with a grilled cheese snadwich and french fries. I stuffed the sandwich into my mouth and nibbled on some fries. I gave a thumbs up to my mom and swallowed as my dad walked in through the front door.
"Hi sweetie!" My dad grinned as he and Mom leaned in for a Couple's Kiss. Suddenly I felt grilled cheese coming back for an encore. I ran to the bathroom sarcastically and made barfing sounds. I heard Mom and Dad giggle a bit so I walked back into the kitchen and finished my fries.
When I reached the bottom, I turned to the right into my garden. I watered my roses first, like always, and then my sunflowers, corn, tomatoes, radishes, and my violets. They looked as if they were drinking up the water as the soil absorbed the liquid.
I smiled and trotted back up my stairs and into the kitchen where my mom was waiting for me with a grilled cheese snadwich and french fries. I stuffed the sandwich into my mouth and nibbled on some fries. I gave a thumbs up to my mom and swallowed as my dad walked in through the front door.
"Hi sweetie!" My dad grinned as he and Mom leaned in for a Couple's Kiss. Suddenly I felt grilled cheese coming back for an encore. I ran to the bathroom sarcastically and made barfing sounds. I heard Mom and Dad giggle a bit so I walked back into the kitchen and finished my fries.
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Great idea, maybe a little writing revision wouldn't go amiss though.
When I first read the title, thought it would be a HP story actually! =D
Nice
Anytime ;)
Wow, it is pretty good! I really like it:
1. Maybe add more detail, although don't push it: Maybe you could say things like:
-I ran down the blue, creaky, paint peeling steps.
But NOT:
-I went down the steps.
-I hobbled down the blue, creaky, uneven, dry, paint-peeling steps two at a time because of how excited I was to water my carrots, radishes and roses...etc.
I think you have a REALLY good story going; Maybe just slow it down a TAD.
Not like a whole page on how the dirt looked, though.
haha lol! Thanks!
This is awesome! :D Really suspenseful at the end of chapter 3 :0
Thanks!
She's underground now? That's so cool! Can't wait to see how she gets out :)
O.O Oh you'll see. 8)
It's really good! :D
lol ikr? It was awesome, and the drawings were great! XD
It's a true story. I mean, Smile.
lol cute! I like it! :)
Is she reading "Smile" by Raina Telgemeir? (probably spelled her last name wrong) I've read that!
And good story- I like it! :)
Yes she is! I loved that book so much I read in in less than a day!
I love that book too! Heehhee. I read it multiple times....In fact, I am gonna go read it right now!